English 101: The College Essay Further Continued

Summary

In this lecture, James Boswell delves into the intricacies of writing a compelling college essay. He begins by analyzing Nathaniel Hawthorne's 'Rappaccini's Daughter,' a tale about the exploitation of a woman by men, paralleling it to modern issues of science versus nature. The session stresses the importance of essay structure, particularly the five-paragraph format, and emphasizes the importance of pre-writing to generate and organize ideas effectively. Boswell shares personal anecdotes and experiences, illustrating his perspective on confronting academic challenges, and offers practical tips and strategies for developing a strong thesis and supporting points.

Highlights

• James Boswell explores Nathaniel Hawthorne's 'Rappaccini's Daughter' as an allegory for the exploitation of women. 📚
• The lecture emphasizes the timeless debate of science interfering with nature. 🧪
• Boswell dissects the five-paragraph essay format as a foundational writing structure. 🗂️
• He shares tips on overcoming procrastination and the importance of starting early. ⏰
• Boswell relates writing an essay to solving a mystery, underscoring the importance of research. 🔍
• Using Ernest Hemingway’s approach, Boswell suggests putting all ideas down as the first step. ✍️
• He provides examples of various attention-grabbing techniques for essay introductions. 🎣
• The lecture underlines the significance of writing on familiar topics to leverage existing knowledge. 🌎

Key Takeaways

• A strong thesis is the backbone of a great essay! 💡
• Pre-writing is crucial to generate ideas and structure! 📝
• Understanding your audience can make your essay more engaging. 🎯
• An engaging hook captures the reader's interest right away! 🪝
• Even the great Ernest Hemingway needed drafts! ✍️

Overview

James Boswell takes his students on a literary journey with Nathaniel Hawthorne's 'Rappaccini's Daughter' as he emphasizes the importance of context and allegory in storytelling. The narrative serves as a springboard for broader discussions on how literature reflects societal issues like gender exploitation and scientific ethics. Boswell seamlessly connects these literary analyses to modern-day contexts, making classic literature relevant to contemporary issues.

Boswell guides his students through the nuts and bolts of essay writing, emphasizing the crucial five-paragraph structure. He explains that a well-crafted essay begins with a strong thesis statement followed by three body paragraphs that each back up that thesis with supporting evidence. In doing so, Boswell highlights the necessity of pre-writing and audience awareness as tools for organizing one's thoughts effectively.

Throughout the lecture, Boswell shares practical advice on overcoming procrastination, generating ideas, and the drafting process. By tapping into personal experiences and referencing famous authors like Ernest Hemingway, he paints a comprehensive picture of the writing journey. His engaging delivery encourages students to see essay writing not as a task but as an opportunity to present their arguments clearly and persuasively.

Chapters

• 00:00 - 05:00: Introduction and Thesis Statement The chapter begins with some technical difficulties in recording, leading the speaker to restart to ensure everything is captured properly. The focus then shifts to Nathaniel Hawthorne's 'Rappaccini's Daughter', described as an intriguing and ambiguous tale about a woman exposed to all evil. This sets the stage for further exploration of themes and analysis regarding Hawthorne's work, likely tying into the thesis statement for the discussion.
• 05:00 - 30:00: Body Paragraph Structure The chapter delves into the "Body Paragraph Structure" of a literary analysis centered around Nathaniel Hawthorne's work. The focus is on Beatrice Rappaccini, a character portrayed as both beautiful and deadly, likened to a poisonous flower. The narrative examines how three male figures - her father, Dr. Rappaccini, her father's rival, Professor Bagley, and her lover, Giovanni - exploit her and contribute to her demise. The chapter suggests that Hawthorne's story is a complex and thrilling narrative woven from myth and legend.
• 30:00 - 55:00: Writing Process and Techniques This chapter discusses the use of allegory in Nathaniel Hawthorne's writing process, particularly focusing on the symbolic setting of a garden, reminiscent of the biblical Garden of Eden. A key element is the mysterious marble fountain, which represents ruin at the garden's center. Through this allegorical landscape, Hawthorne intricately weaves a mystery that captivates readers, highlighting the contrast between dreamlike plots and real, important concerns.
• 55:00 - 80:00: Thesis Examples and Exercises The chapter discusses the allure and danger of beauty through the story of Dr. Rappaccini, who raises his daughter, Beatrice, in a garden filled with poisonous plants. Although his scientific experiments aim to create beauty, they ultimately result in suffering and misery.
• 80:00 - 100:00: Supporting Material and Conclusion Preview The chapter titled 'Supporting Material and Conclusion Preview' delves into the skepticism surrounding Dr. Rappuccini's ethics and intentions. Professor Baglioni is heavily critical and cautious of Dr. Rappuccini, claiming that he would endanger human life, including his own, for even the slightest advancement in scientific knowledge. This sentiment reflects Baglioni's disapproval and distrust of Rappuccini. The narrative hints at a broader fear that Beatrice, potentially influenced by her father's radical pursuits, might also inherit these controversial ideals or methods in her own life.

English 101: The College Essay Further Continued Transcription

• 00:00 - 00:30 there we go trying to record here okay i looked up and didn't see it happening hmm i'm gonna start again because i want to capture this in the recording and then i'll emphasize what i just said sorry that i'm going to repeat nathaniel hawthorne's rapper cheney's daughter is an intriguing intriguing ambiguous tale about a woman exposed to all evil
• 00:30 - 01:00 and it was the monstrous offspring of man's depraved fancy beatrice rappuccini a lovely yet poisonous flower was exploited by three men that's the thesis again dr rappuccini her father professor bagley only her father's rival and giovanni her lover who smears and attempts to dominate her resulted in her death hawthorne creates an elusive exciting tale which is based on myth and legend
• 01:00 - 01:30 although his plot reads like a dream story his concerns are real and important much of the action takes place in a garden as we have mentioned before an allegorical eden garden of eden uh is uh alluded to with the ruin of a marble fountain at its center the reader discovers early in the tale that beatrice's home is not an ordinary place and the reader is therefore caught up into the mystery hawthorne has created that's
• 01:30 - 02:00 introductory material as i had said before one is drawn toward a beautiful garden and a beautiful lady but one learns that the lady in the garden are the result of an experiment beatrice's father dr rappagini has reared his daughter like his plans through using poisons dr rappagenia figure in the name of science attempts to create beauty however he creates misery
• 02:00 - 02:30 and unhappiness for his daughter professor baglioni next paragraph suspicious of the doctor reveals that rappuccini and i'm quoting from the tale would sacrifice human life his own among the rest for the sake of adding so much as a grain of mustard seed to the great heap that was accumulated in knowledge obviously the professor dislikes rapper genie and elsewhere we discover that he fears beatrice will acquire his
• 02:30 - 03:00 teaching position he is not interested in beatrice's salvation his act is not that of heroism for she dies from drinking his antidote giovanni beatrice's lover is a weak impotent man who does not fully give himself to be a truth we learned that he has never touched her physically therefore one can assume that he has
• 03:00 - 03:30 idolized her and could not accept her as she was in reality i'm going to go a lot deeper and all these things i've just presented toward the end of the course beatrice is the femme fatale those uh french words being fatal woman in the vein of the greek medusa the greek medusa was a woman when a beautiful one when men looked upon her she turned them into stone but anyway beatrice from greek mythology
• 03:30 - 04:00 is the femme fatale in the vein of the greek medusa only ironically she is pure and good a victim of the men who through chauvinism and modern signs caused her death all beatrice wanted was to be giovanni's lover all she received was the cup of death now this is the concluding paragraph rabbitini's daughter is a romantic tale
• 04:00 - 04:30 which describes a woman exploited by three men restatement of the thesis statement it is a very modern tale which questions the issue of whether science should interfere with nature hawthorne obviously had a dim view of those who divorced intellect from the heart as each of these three men had done and then here is my clincher in our age
• 04:30 - 05:00 of genetic engineering this concern raised by hawthorne is very much with us today and some of those concerns are with us like right now you know and more so than when the story was written and that's what i'll be exploring uh when i um i get to that part of the semester you know because people do mistrust science even today you know
• 05:00 - 05:30 especially those um who mistrust scientists that say in a pandemic wear a mask you know and social distance they're mistrusting um so there's a certain amount of mistrust that might be appropriate when it is being science is being abused and misused no but we've got a lot more a lot more checkpoints in the 21st century than they did in the 19th when the story
• 05:30 - 06:00 was written so i'm going to work with that idea as we get toward the end of the course now what i want you to remember is the writing process i want to say a few words about the writing process and then i'm going to move forward review a few things and so that you can have a better understanding of the five paragraph essay and what i'm
• 06:00 - 06:30 teaching can go into any essay you know for any class no matter how many pages and how many paragraphs you need to write this is a basic building block that you can build on as you progress through your education now the hardest part about doing anything is getting started that is really the hardest part that's why they say if you get started you're have done we just um continue to put it off
• 06:30 - 07:00 some people do it's called procrastination hoping that the task will go away or that someone else will do it we all face this challenge but one must get started and begin generating important ideas pre-writing the important thing is to just get started and once you get started just keep on writing and do not expect your first idea to be
• 07:00 - 07:30 brilliant in college i personally looked at a writing assignment the way a detective would try to solve a murder case you know i told you i like cop shows and watch many many talk shows for all intents of herself i've watched quite a few um i had to get evidence yeah just like or there's a problem
• 07:30 - 08:00 you need evidence i did this by what i call this is my term digging you know i did research in books taking notes you know and i didn't have the the um uh internet you know databases and the like didn't have that you know i had the actual artifact on shelves you know um so i had to uh go to the library
• 08:00 - 08:30 i wrote down my opinions from my very limited experience you know i enter college as a teenager you know which maybe most of you are i don't know i don't know your age just didn't look them up but uh i was a typical right out of high school into college teenager and that's why i said limited experience but i did have opinions i talked to my friends or you say peers if you like to get
• 08:30 - 09:00 their opinions as well you know i made certain that i knew my position like a detective i wanted to prove my point to someone who might not agree with my point of view and that someone would have been my readers specifically my teacher i always had my journal been journaling throughout my life and my limited experiences to draw from i did a lot of thinking and research
• 09:00 - 09:30 and research while i did all of this i did a lot of writing too so that i could select the best from what i had gathered you know i always wrote more than i needed and then boiled it down to fit the requirements because in those days if they said four pages they didn't read beyond page four you could have as many pages you want they weren't they're all gonna read four pages and if they said four pages don't give them two you know unless they ask for two
• 09:30 - 10:00 you know i did i didn't play around with my my my future you know didn't take unnecessary risks so the most important rule is to write on something that you know something about otherwise you have to do more research you can draw on your experiences your travels real or imaginary a lot of my travels have been imaginary you know reading lots of reading
• 10:00 - 10:30 your volunteer work if you've done volunteer work jobs and your reading your goal is to tap into the vast resources and they are vast that you have in the beginning and do as ernest hemingway did what did he do he would start with a blank piece of paper and put all that he knew at the time on that blank paper was how
• 10:30 - 11:00 he started that's what was his pre-writing technique the important thing is that you have to get those ideas to come out you know that's why pre-writing is a way of making that happen there are so many that you would be surprised because you've lived on this earth your mind has taken in what you've experienced and observed you know whether you recall it or not it's in there and you want to retrieve it if you need
• 11:00 - 11:30 it to write an essay the magic of getting ideas marjorie holmes once said is to just simply sit down and write now we had um mentioned uh what did we mention audience and position and i need to try to find that material so i can go over some of those things um
• 11:30 - 12:00 if i can find it there it is i sent it as a pdf a while ago if i can find it let's see put on one of these sheets it's not that one it's not that one oh boy no i can't get at it let me see if i can't uh find that i think i want to click click
• 12:00 - 12:30 that out oh there it is i lost everything else in the process but anyway i'm probably going to go get it sometimes you click things you don't know what's going to happen audience equals your readers that the paper is directed to as i tried to explain last class you are to describe yours there audience whether real or imaginary most likely will be imaginary
• 12:30 - 13:00 but i also want position and i tried to explain that you are to imagine for example a job title that qualifies you to write to the audience you have just described or some sort of title that you give yourself and it requires creativity if you understand this concept and direct your paper accordingly using the papers are much better and so i wrote papers written to the wins are usually voiceless and boring
• 13:00 - 13:30 you know i want you to connect with your readers and this is examples that i i gave off the top of my head audience can be students your position could be teacher audience can be students your position can be student you can get more creative than this but i want you to minimally understand what i'm trying to ask for and it depends on the topic too um position successful parent your audience mothers and fathers because you're talking about issues related to raising children
• 13:30 - 14:00 now um let me get out of this subject light over here okay let me get back and try to get back to my powerpoint i was dealing with moving from rappertini's daughter picking up right here review the introduction
• 14:00 - 14:30 and we mentioned attention getter we're going to say more about that shortly um an exciting hook that we found and then the three body paragraphs see the five paragraph essay is probably overused but um it's used a lot you know um high schools tend to uh to to do so um and uh it can be used in college a number of colleges do i do in english 101. moving on to english 102 i i use the same pattern but they can
• 14:30 - 15:00 write as many paragraphs as they want you know as far as that is concerned but the structure remains very similar thesis in the introduction topic sentence support explanation in each of the body paragraphs this is review thesis statement is restated refer back to hook you know and that could be your clincher i call my approach as i said before the structured approach
• 15:00 - 15:30 and here's an example of a thesis statement everything before the word because is your thesis what follows the word because is your plan in development now way i did the plan of development here was i a b and c you know um normally um and i should have written it this way it would be one sentence with a couple of commas and an and you know but i want to break it up so you can see
• 15:30 - 16:00 points you know that was my intent the educational system must become more effective yeah all right yeah we wanted to be as effective as possible because it's preparing you not only to function in your future in this country but to function in the world you know i often have said that you compete with everybody in the world that gets a college education and you want to be successful
• 16:00 - 16:30 because and here's the plan of development the points most jobs require college training and they do in this country they do not everyone's getting that not everyone's choosing to not everyone needs to choose to however you have the us has lost much ground to competitors they don't like to say much about that
• 16:30 - 17:00 now it is dope um you have to listen between the lines of the of the politicians what they're saying about competition people must acquire more skills you know i tried to explain what those skills are when i began the course that's how i started the course you know getting started properly and
• 17:00 - 17:30 knowing what you're up against knowing what your investment is all about with the hopes that it would encourage you not discourage you but to encourage you that there's a bright future you know um i heard this uh speech on television last evening and the person said you have to fight you know he was talking about uh this individual was talking about his success starting from very very little it has
• 17:30 - 18:00 moved on up if i mentioned the name you wouldn't know who it was yeah and says a lot of the things i say in the classroom makes me feel like hmm then i don't keep saying it people must acquire more skills paragraph on each of those points the essay will need to provide information in the body facts and details so now we mentioned something about competition and that kind of thing i just wanted to follow up with this uh visual a here top selling cars
• 18:00 - 18:30 one of the top selling cars in my youth was the chevrolet impala you know was in the top ranks today it's the honda you know even though some uh they are made in the united states some of them it still um originates from japan you know and then my youth um i don't even think honda was making
• 18:30 - 19:00 cars and um motorcycles but uh if they were making cars and i think they probably were even then um they weren't in the top rank at that time it is now i believe that's a 2020 honda the number one selling car in the united states in 1980 and that same year was the oldsmobile i looked it up the oldsmobile cutlass was the best selling car i remember that car
• 19:00 - 19:30 too beautiful car i mean that's a probably picture was probably taken in 1980 but it was a top selling car that has changed you know oldsmobile is no longer manufactured anymore in the united states you know people don't remember um when um these um general motors almost went belly up you know and the government had to bail them out you know and i'm gonna say it that was during the obama administration
• 19:30 - 20:00 you know this country would be totally different if that particular bailout hadn't occurred chevrolet and chrysler ford sort of held its own to repeat introduction uh attention getter narrow down towards the thesis a clear thesis and we see what it says mr hulsey it says essay map plan of development the three points in the
• 20:00 - 20:30 plan of development it's also referred to as an outline of your plan uh it's also been called divisions you know it's a very useful technique to carry the reader through you know sometimes we think writing we just throw words on a paper and hope no you don't have to hope you have a lot of control yeah the thesis is the main controlling idea by the way body paragraphs now it says can be more
• 20:30 - 21:00 than three i just want three but it can be more than three but i just want three topic sentence supporting details this is another diagram i like to show things in different ways you know because it re hopefully it reinforces the idea in a concluding sentence this is what i've been saying you know we're going to look at body paragraphs specifically we're going to break it down into the parts but we're looking at you know we're reviewing some overview sporting details concluding sentence
• 21:00 - 21:30 same thing for the third body paragraph here in the conclusion where you restate thesis isn't that what i've been saying summarize your argument the word thesis doesn't mean argument and this is thoughtful ending you know when you put it all together all the things i've been showing you the different things i've showed you from different sources it should create a rich picture and enhance your understanding now i want to focus on how to write a good introduction paragraph
• 21:30 - 22:00 that's what i want to deal with now effective attention grabbers you know i'm just making a list you know we did give you a um handout and a pdf form that uh dealt with attention getters you know um for example broad general statement they'll be lines
• 22:00 - 22:30 broad in general but you get specific as you get closer to the thesis statement you know in planet development and then you stay specific throughout the rest of the favor but you started with something broad in general and when we gave you um the handout writing an essay um writing an essay um writing the essay because the names are very similar um which was a chapter from look there's
• 22:30 - 23:00 an example broad general statement contrast type is starting with the opposite of where you're going to go you know i call it the reverse psychology approach you know and it can be very useful not not it's not used a lot in student essays but it is a possibility you can start out explaining the importance of your topic in the opening lines
• 23:00 - 23:30 use a brief story some of these are better than others but it's a brief story a brief anecdote is another word for a brief story here before you get to the thesis direct announcement i usually try to steer students away from the direct announcement approach even though it can be quite direct it's most useful in writing essays on an essay exam as opposed to a paper wanting to be a little bit more creative
• 23:30 - 24:00 a popular technique is questions you know because i often if you ask the right questions uh in an essay it does pique interest you know um so one or more questions and a quote you know i demonstrated that even though you couldn't see the word the words i i did start my rapper genie's daughter piece wait a quote uh fascinating facts
• 24:00 - 24:30 too you know and i i found some you know that i'm just going to use you know it says read on this side um and then on the back there's some fascinating facts some of which i've already shared with you in the past let me reshare 25 million children in the u.s today cannot read proficiently 25 million that's 25 million too many 65 of fourth grade students do not read at a proficient
• 24:30 - 25:00 level that's 65 that's nearly all of them two out of three children living in poverty have no books to call their own that's why dolly parton has this program remember i shared the program that dolly parton has to put books in the hands of impoverished children you know this comes from the organization reading is fundamental fascinating facts they're not positive but they're fascinating
• 25:00 - 25:30 um and we all need to play a role after grabbing the reader's attention present the thesis present the thesis i find that college is a trying experience because everything i underline the thesis now i did give you this uh in one of the pdfs i sent um i guess it was two maybe two weeks ago soon and it has on it in pretty big letters
• 25:30 - 26:00 because now you don't need to number your points i'm just doing that so you can see that there are three points in the plan of i want a three-part plan of development because the teachers are dull the courses are irrelevant and the students are unfriendly you know this is a person not having a good time in college and so a paragraph will be
• 26:00 - 26:30 written on each paragraph on the teachers you know they're not happy with them they're a dog a paragraph on the courses they don't think the courses are or are relevant you know why do i have to take this you know it's the attitude you know and the students are unfriendly you know it's hard to i i suspect to make friends in a remote environment especially the way i present material and uh i hope uh
• 26:30 - 27:00 that it's not a bad experience for you i hope that it's a learning experience for you but uh all the saying that's an argument the plan of development equals one two and three i'm highlighting it the plan development is the controlling idea it covers all the points of the essay well the point of the essay
• 27:00 - 27:30 it only deals with the points in the essay nothing else deals with the points only with the points in the essay you know you don't talk about cafeteria food you know that's not in the plan of development you know you didn't say you're going to talk about that at all you know you said you're going to talk about the teachers first keep it in order the courses second and third
• 27:30 - 28:00 the students you know that's what you said you're going to do and that's what the reader expects you to do so the thesis is the controlling idea you know um now and that is an argument because i found college um a liberating experience to be quite frank now i want to i think i want to go to yeah i want to go to this one then back up we're dealing with thesis statement now
• 28:00 - 28:30 attention getter draw the reader in uh maybe i should go to see if i can't find my pdf um i clicked off of most of these suckers but i think i have the one that i still need as we deal with the thesis statement there's a sample paper report sheet which i've more or less have gone over let's see if i can't find topic
• 28:30 - 29:00 suggestions which i've already gone over uh this deals with body paragraphs don't want to deal with that yet and this is the um what i just went over you know thesis main point must be proven where it's found introductory paragraph and restated in the fifth paragraph this is what i want to make reference to very quickly i'm not going to read this to you but i just want to make uh reference to the different types of attention
• 29:00 - 29:30 getter ideas you can start with humor startling statement questions is a rather popular one refer to the familiar the print is a little small a series of examples definition even you could begin with a statistic when i was sharing you the fascinating facts those were also now statistics just wanted to reference i may get back to that because there's some sample thesis
• 29:30 - 30:00 statements there college is not worth the time for some people that you know that's how they feel and that's an argument now i believe college is worth the time but some people don't act as though they do and they may not you know because of the challenges i suspect college is not worth the time for the lazy that's a plan of development for those who do not wish to work hard
• 30:00 - 30:30 and for those who do not wish to be leaders it is not worth the time then you see a thesis has two parts two parts the first part states the topic the second part states the point of the essay and then the plan of development is to follow and here are some examples
• 30:30 - 31:00 it might give you paper topics you know this might give you a possible paper topic these weren't meant to do that but it might kenya's culture that's a part of the thesis statement and then connected with has a rich and varied history building a model train set takes time and patience public transportation and then the third
• 31:00 - 31:30 item can solve some of our city's most persistent and pressing problems you know that's the thesis statement or by itself then the plan of development follows now here's a sample these are statements here and then i'll look at some others i'm going to look ahead here yeah okay i have to look ahead sometimes to see what's there
• 31:30 - 32:00 um anyway the book was good and i liked everything about it now that's one of those bad thesis statements yeah and plan of development is he is absent you know and it's vague too broad and vague tells me next to nothing no let's revise it the next thesis statement is revised
• 32:00 - 32:30 the plan of development is at the beginning structure that's point one characterization that's point two and plot that's point three are the three elements notice how clear that is that contribute the most to making emily bronte's wuthering heights a great work of art those three points very clear they're going to talk it's a
• 32:30 - 33:00 great novel one one of the best novels um ever written the structure will be talked about first the characters what we talked about second and you might want to read it the only bronte's weathering height you might want to watch the movie and the plot paragraph on that they're going to argue that these three elements make
• 33:00 - 33:30 wuthering heights by emily bronte a great work of art now the next um example of a thesis statement is wonderful as is it needs no revision space exploration is expensive that's the whole point and yes it is but here comes the plan of development the technology it has created has profoundly influenced three things communication systems
• 33:30 - 34:00 medical care and even food production you know some some some wonderful points there you know if you were to research um that particular item i'm trying to find um some supporting evidence for what's on my feet i find it fascinating um i cut out a um article from this right here patriot news a number of years ago and it's entitled
• 34:00 - 34:30 earthly benefits of space flight so the benefits you know like smoke detectors you know that's an application from outer space you know where it was probably tested cordless drills scratch resistant coatings things we all take for granted today no um eyeglass frames that are flexible yeah um scanners which you almost can't do without imaging technologies
• 34:30 - 35:00 you know the miracle that that is the wonderful things that can be done with uh these statements must be unified restricted and precise unified you restricted r and precise p earp you know unified restricted
• 35:00 - 35:30 and precise you might want to remember that you know i'm going to say more about it a little bit later let's see what i want to do next all right i just did that one [Music] repeat it repeat it there structure of the thesis oh there was one other thing i want to do before that that's what i want to do before that i'm going back
• 35:30 - 36:00 and forth but i don't want to skip another example of a thesis statement and a mighty good one at that irritating the teacher is unwise well it's unwise to irritate anybody you know you know like a spouse or you know girlfriend boyfriend friend neighbor you know yeah you don't want to be a you don't want to be irritating but anyway but i chose this one because sometimes that may happen
• 36:00 - 36:30 in the classroom irritating the teachers unwise because here are the three reasons it's underlined one's grade is compromised you know no matter how the teachers are human beings too we struggle we have challenges just like you do you know
• 36:30 - 37:00 it's called life the kindness i read in a student paper recently i don't know which class is very important in fact uh one student cited it as a key to happen is being kind to people so i like that statement once the greatest compromise one may fail depending on of course the severity of the irritation that can happen i think it's pretty rare these days
• 37:00 - 37:30 and teachers should be respected you know i think respect is a very important thing that's why aretha franklin remember her she was talking about respect in one of her songs sang about it you know one of her song r-e-s-p-e-c-t you know she spelled it out you know because she was talking about respect not only for women but also for all people you know because
• 37:30 - 38:00 you know sometimes people don't respect other people when they deserve to be respected so a paragraph on each one of those notice the points paragraph two i'm just trying to show how you can you know do the points here one's great is compromise that's in paragraph two whole paragraph on that you need a transition word don't forget your transition works one may fail see one may fail now i'm that echo is pretty strong you know you
• 38:00 - 38:30 yeah be careful how you echo but you want to echo from the plan of development and support of the thesis see points are derived from the plan of development is what i'm trying to show here teachers should be respected the conclusion restates the main points of wraps up the wraps up the paper and i didn't write a concluding statement there or a restatement sentence there and another example
• 38:30 - 39:00 of a thesis statement learning to write is important you know it's one of the greatest things you can do you know i mean there's a lot of great things you can do but writing is one of them you know learning to write is important in the information age this is the information age because so everything before the word because i've shown you
• 39:00 - 39:30 several ways of writing a thesis data because it builds intellect improves the ability to communicate and improves wanted productivity check something and i'll get back to this in a moment i want to look at some other sample thesis statements in my pdf sometimes i don't have time to do that but i've decided to to do that i just i just bring all my
• 39:30 - 40:00 uh i call it my ammunition and uh i just use it as i moved to use it now i've got to rotate this bag he samples these statements this might give you and i it might give you an idea for paper it wasn't designed to do that i just wanted to emphasize plan of development nursing for example which some of you are planning to become nurses are needed more
• 40:00 - 40:30 more than ever due to a shortage that it continues growth in the healthcare field it'll continue to grow and because of in the third point the aging population i want to skip down to college professor i thought i'd do this one being a college professor requires a lot of education the joy of learning and a lot of time i don't do them all i just want to do a
• 40:30 - 41:00 few of them you might want to become a lawyer in deciding to enter the law profession as a lawyer these are um examples of thesis statements that i used in my developmental english class and so i tried to make it as simple as possible for them to understand how to write a thesis and plan development which they were struggling with that so i thought i would share with you because if i make it simple enough maybe you will write good thesis
• 41:00 - 41:30 statements plans of development and ultimately very good papers in deciding to enter the law profession as a lawyer one must consider the educational requirements the duties and the responsibilities and finally the opportunities and some of these other things deal with the environment like floods create many major problems it's kind of obvious though they destroy the the environment kill many people and devastate property you can see how that can be i hope you
• 41:30 - 42:00 can see how that can be developed i'm gonna let you read the rest of them on your own but i just wanted to make reference to that particular item now structure of the thesis statement now i did notice that uh i want to look into my share for a minute there was something in the chat maybe something um okay was a private uh statement
• 42:00 - 42:30 and um unfortunately you don't know this but one of your classmates is uh struggling i say hang in there to every one of you no okay i just want to see it was a private uh statement so i'm not going to respond more than what i've already done a thesis uh identifying thesis um is an interpretation
• 42:30 - 43:00 your interpretation of the information a thesis is a conclusion and i've said this several times your conclusion on the material and you phrase it in the thesis and the plan of development to later in the body paragraphs prove it a thesis statement can be reduced to particulars that's another
• 43:00 - 43:30 way of saying plan and development that's another way of saying points you know these are the key features of a thesis statement the key features your thesis statement must in the body of the essay explain prove and defend you you're explaining proving and
• 43:30 - 44:00 defending not only your reputation but your position and so we repeat a thesis statement must be unified restricted and precise i have that in there again um well i don't want to do it twice well i was going to review it but i want to look at something else yeah this one i want to get to then back up again because of those visual images there
• 44:00 - 44:30 i could wait till next time but i don't want to i'm just going to go ahead and do it um thesis statement another example i hope you're getting the idea here i don't know if you're writing down any of these that's up to you um but i hope that you're getting the idea for what i'm looking for you know i'm being very explicit i am looking for a thesis statement with a three-part plan of development then you write on each one of the items it's organization now the details please
• 44:30 - 45:00 don't forget them they're very important but you have a direction and it's uh provides clarity um the rabbitini's daughter essay that i wrote now yes i was in my uh my youth i keep saying my twenties when i wrote that and i wanted to be clear and to the point that was always my my objective in
• 45:00 - 45:30 writing anything the details are very important how you develop the point is very important an immature student misses class often now there are people that are you know the behavior is the same whether it's remote or face to face um i don't know about virtual i don't do that but um this is called remote instruction where we have to be together or need to be together and i'm trying to pull out all the stops
• 45:30 - 46:00 to make it as close to what i'd be doing in a face-to-face setting in this remote environment and i consider the height of immaturity because we're adults you know when you just for no apparent reason you know because if you miss a week of work and you don't tell them why you're out of there in many companies many organizations you know
• 46:00 - 46:30 i mean um mrs class often does not do the assignments that makes that compounds the issue and will suffer many negative consequences for such behavior because if that's the behavior you do when you're paying money when you're trying to learn when you're trying to climb the proverbial ladder what makes you think that when you have professional employment you're not going to try to do the same because that's what you know no i could be wrong i don't think so you know because i've
• 46:30 - 47:00 seen employees get fired for the very same behavior you know and the different companies i've worked for including harrisburg area community college you know so um you know good people are let go you know if it's a downturn in the economy you know weak people are the fast the first to go so being a good student carries over into the workplace in my opinion
• 47:00 - 47:30 and will suffer many negative consequences for such behavior now my discussion in the body i have to explain that i'd have to explain what i mean by mrs class often you know some people miss more classes than they attend you know um i would have to describe those students and i would need to give some examples and i have plenty that i can give you know because i think the first step to success is being present you know
• 47:30 - 48:00 and doing your best then i'd have to discuss the assignments yeah those who do not do them or do few of them you know i had to deal with a student recently hasn't done paper number one hasn't done paper number two how in hc double hockey sticks do they expect to pass yeah
• 48:00 - 48:30 all you gotta do is do the math because the lines share the grade is the final exam but also the papers which way more heavily than the final exam and the quizzes no um that's 200 points gone can't overcome it you know even if one were to get a hundred percent probably in everything else they probably would still have a shortfall
• 48:30 - 49:00 and that's not going to happen you know good students do not make those kind of mistakes they just simply do not you know after more than three decades of teaching i've not seen it the other way you know you know good students will overwhelm you and that's as it should be you know so anyway i don't know i got up on that little tangent but i did um then the last paragraph i would have
• 49:00 - 49:30 to miss i would have to list excuse me the consequences i think you know what they are for jobs prospects you know because they want the best who doesn't no matter what the organization is you know sometimes people substandard people slip in there but that's where companies fall down you know go bankrupt i mean your problems you know some people are thriving people will thrive uh in the business world in spite of
• 49:30 - 50:00 what's going on in the pandemic and some won't for whatever reason you know poor job prospect some uh it could be suspended from college you know because some people just collect failing grades i don't understand it but they do how can you fail every course well it's easy they just don't do the work or attend and they didn't withdraw you know i can tell you what they did and it's a waste of time but you never get back and i would be writing that in that paragraph
• 50:00 - 50:30 and it wastes money i don't know how much money you got to waste but um a student who signed up for my class twice you know not once but twice messed around lost no refund yeah that's why i looked on they they tell us this one you know um it said withdrawal no refund that means he had to pay something can't refund nothing no and i don't i told him these courses aren't cheap
• 50:30 - 51:00 you know i hope it wasn't his parents money now i have a feeling it might be now let me look at this side i'm just going to go ahead and go over the um sheet that i sent you because it might give you a paper topic and you can you know you can practice on your own or you can just pay attention to what i'm doing now that's enough um this deals with exercise i just want to show these pictures the young people and uh they're not so young people exercising i don't know if you heard
• 51:00 - 51:30 about the woman i'm somewhat unattended i'm going to move a little bit further um who um skydived uh recently 102 it was on her bucket list the skydive 102 you know she was in the military world war two you know anyway exercise is important because it prolongs life keeps one healthy and keeps one looking good
• 51:30 - 52:00 yeah i was inspired by that um uh one paragraph essay i share with you um but different words here exercise prolongs life these are just the points the topic sentences need um you know transition words first of all exercise for a long slide secondly exercise you know keeps one healthy finally and then the ease will not be capitalized in that case and the comma after each of those
• 52:00 - 52:30 transition words exercise keeps one looking good yeah now this next one this is the biology one i'm just gonna go ahead and share with you i hope it um helps i don't know if it does but i hope um that'll help you out somewhat um biology is a difficult course yeah i put that there for you folks who are going into sciences
• 52:30 - 53:00 and like the sciences biology is a difficult course because of the long labs the lectures and complicated tests to begin with biology is a tough course because of the long two-hour labs transition word echoing from the plan of development in addition to the long labs um uh they are boring i think i left a word out
• 53:00 - 53:30 um uh yeah i left the word out there are the boring doll lectures i left out a whole word there got something now it's in there there are the boring doll lectures should have saved that topic sentence number three most of all the complicated tests make biology quite difficult
• 53:30 - 54:00 so that one's on the test this one's on the labs that one is on um let's say no all the lectures excuse me and this one's on labs you know i happen to like biology actually actually i took two courses in college and one in high school um but anyway um and i had a wonderful teacher three-part plan of development transition words topic sentences and restatement sentence and conclusion biology is a tough course
• 54:00 - 54:30 due to the long labs dull lectures and complicated tests so i hope that you got an understanding of the theme outline activity and that might be a paper topic too i don't know um i want to move on and move a little bit forward here because i want to deal with body paragraphs now and we've already mentioned that there will be three of them that's what we want and body paragraph
• 54:30 - 55:00 should have topic sentence background sentences as appropriate and types of supporting information include quotation explanation maybe analysis uh quotations there twice some reason um discussion and transition you know i don't know why i was repeating it but it is i'm not going to repeat that several times another example of a um body paragraph it's another way
• 55:00 - 55:30 of looking at it i can go online and look for different ways of presenting material general information introduction topic sentence focusing direction of the paper where you're telling showing by getting more specific and supporting details and data and then conclusions and you know it's like the one paragraph this is from purdue university by the way this is what they teach their students about the body paragraph
• 55:30 - 56:00 you see conclusions and brief wrap up they also call it the warrant you know um well that's purdue university okay now types of supporting material the example and i gave you a sheet that goes through this i'm just going to mention them for now illustration there are two types hypothetical and factual
• 56:00 - 56:30 an instance comparison figurative and literal statistics again statistics numbers and testimony and that would be the quotation type now i'm going to probably go to the next one here and then back up i'm trying to see where i'm at here um back up to that next time yeah i'm saving the concluding paragraph
• 56:30 - 57:00 definitely saving that for next time because i want to wrap i want to wrap up the new net next time there may be a little carryover into thursday i mean um wednesday of next week but anyway thesis is in the introduction that's a picture of houdini houdini and that's when he lived 1874-1926 and that's a picture of him down there a successful showman knew
• 57:00 - 57:30 how to captivate his spectators with danger and suspense with humor and with curiosity so reinforcing the plan of development to more or less apply it briefly to body to three body paragraphs there would be a paragraph on dangerous suspense in the example could be the metal trunk act
• 57:30 - 58:00 humor body paragraph on humor swinging straight jacket act is one of the examples you know might be only example just explained in detail curiosity the glass case act you know that would be the example illustrating curiosity that drew in the spectators he was considered one of the greatest showmen of all time um well anyway
• 58:00 - 58:30 um the metal trunk actually be put in the metal trunk and it would be chained uh and submerged and he'd get out the swinging straight jacket act they put the straight jacket on him where he could not move and he'd be swinging from a building or whatever and he'd get out i didn't and then the glass case act he would be chained again in the glass case submerged
• 58:30 - 59:00 and he get out amazing now um let me see what's this one well we'll start with the body paragraph this uh gives a um i'm making myself a note so i know where i left off at um because what we're going to plan to do the next time is the body paragraph um i'm going to revisit i'm ready to
• 59:00 - 59:30 note again types of supporting information i just want to go over that um pdf item um that i sent you almost two weeks ago now um just to point out some things so that when you are um developing your points you have some more ammunition in order to do so now i'm going to click out of there um i had a lot a lot to present there
• 59:30 - 60:00 are there any questions anyone any concerns please note i'm expecting um at least by the 24th paper report sheets that they can trickle in because then i only have a few each day to do but they can all come in at the same time
• 60:00 - 60:30 but the sooner they come in the more quicker the more quicker i'll be able to respond you know i want to encourage you to hang in there in all your classes i don't know how many you have i have no idea what your schedules are other than this particular class you may have a full load and a job and a family all those things make getting educated in a remote environment a challenge but you can do it and you can do it well
• 60:30 - 61:00 that's all i have for today and we'll see you next time take care of yourselves thank you thank you ms back mr hoy ms blevins skagno valentin thank you welcome uh miss morrison uh i think i've said every name mr livingston bowers livingston
• 61:00 - 61:30 ms lipart see ya take care