English 101: The Process Analysis Essay Continued

Summary

Highlights

• James Boswell encourages using the writing center to improve writing skills. 🖊️
• Stay organized by keeping track of assignments and due dates in a planner. 📅
• Boswell shares humorous anecdotes about student life to lighten the mood. 😂
• Discussions include how to balance school work with personal life effectively. ⚖️
• The lecture covers the essentials of process analysis essays and their structure. 📑
• Practical advice on managing time and studying effectively is shared. ⏳

Key Takeaways

• Always follow the instructions carefully to avoid losing points. 📜
• Attend classes regularly and submit assignments on time for best results. ⏰
• Utilize resources like tutoring centers for better learning and grades. 📚
• Maintain a positive attitude and stay persistent in your learning journey. 💪
• Set realistic goals and work systematically towards achieving them. 🎯
• Balance your academic pursuits with self-care and mental exercises. 🧘‍♂️

Overview

Chapters

• 01:30 - 10:30: Introduction and Greetings The chapter sets the stage with a series of introductory remarks, providing an overview of the book's themes and objectives. The narrator greets the audience, establishing an inviting and engaging tone that encourages readers to delve deeper into the content. Various greetings are employed, indicating a global perspective and inclusivity. Additionally, there's an introduction to key concepts and a brief outline of what readers can expect in the subsequent chapters.
• 10:30 - 21:00: Class Discussion and Feedback on Papers The chapter focuses on a classroom setting where students and the teacher engage in a discussion about the students' papers. The dialogue emphasizes feedback exchange, offering constructive criticism, and sharing insights to improve the quality of the students' writing. The session is interactive, with students actively participating by asking questions and providing their thoughts on their peers' work. The teacher facilitates the discussion, guiding students to consider different perspectives and encouraging them to apply the feedback in their revisions. The chapter highlights the importance of collaborative learning and the role of feedback in the academic growth of students.
• 21:00 - 33:00: Process Analysis Explanation The chapter titled 'Process Analysis Explanation' contains a transcript primarily consisting of speech pads such as 'um'. Due to the lack of substantive content, a detailed summary of key concepts cannot be provided.
• 33:00 - 51:00: Grammar and Writing Tips This chapter focuses on grammar and writing tips, providing practical advice and techniques to improve writing skills. It covers essential grammar rules, common mistakes to avoid, and how to create clear, concise, and engaging content.
• 51:00 - 75:00: Steps to Happiness and Success The chapter titled 'Steps to Happiness and Success' begins with a greeting, 'good morning sharp'. Though the transcript seems incomplete or perhaps an error, it suggests the start of a motivational or instructional segment aimed at guiding the reader or listener toward achieving personal happiness and success. This could possibly lay the foundation for the chapters that follow, introducing a tone of positivity and focus.
• 75:00 - 82:00: Sample Thesis and Plan Development The chapter begins with a morning greeting to Ms. Santos, signaling the start of a new day and possibly a meeting or a lecture to discuss thesis and plan development.
• 82:00 - 87:00: Sample Essay Discussion In the chapter titled 'Sample Essay Discussion', the dialogue begins with a participant affirming their understanding or readiness ('yes okay'), followed by a mention of 'zocker' which may imply a topic or person relevant to the discussion. The transcript snippet is too brief and lacks context to provide a comprehensive summary, indicating the need for more detailed content to understand the chapter's focus.
• 87:00 - 92:00: Concluding Remarks and Q&A The chapter 'Concluding Remarks and Q&A' begins with Mr. Hoy providing his final thoughts on the topic discussed. The session is then opened up to a Q&A segment where participants ask questions relevant to the presentation. Key takeaways and any additional insights shared by Mr. Hoy during the Q&A are also captured in this chapter.
• 92:00 - 95:00: Post-Class Discussion The chapter titled 'Post-Class Discussion' likely begins with a focus on preparatory remarks or activities as suggested by the initial words, indicating the start of a session or interaction. However, the incomplete sentence limits the ability to provide a full summary of the discussion that might have taken place post-class. Further details from the transcript would be necessary to construct a comprehensive summary of the chapter's content.

English 101: The Process Analysis Essay Continued Transcription

• 00:00 - 00:30 foreign
• 00:30 - 01:00 um
• 01:00 - 01:30 um
• 01:30 - 02:00 morning everyone
• 02:00 - 02:30 good morning sharp
• 02:30 - 03:00 good morning warning is that ms santos
• 03:00 - 03:30 yes okay um zocker and
• 03:30 - 04:00 mr hoy
• 04:00 - 04:30 we'll get started shortly i just was
• 04:30 - 05:00 doing last minute items my preparation
• 05:00 - 05:30 for today
• 05:30 - 06:00 so i hope everyone had a good weekend it's cold morning the weather's supposed to get better by the weekend and time is a fly-in november is the busiest month
• 06:00 - 06:30 december might be pretty busy but um school ends in mid-december i think if i got the dates right and then doesn't pick up again until it's like i think second week of january so it's a reasonable uh break unless you're taking
• 06:30 - 07:00 a winter term course which some people do because that's only four weeks and you'll usually only take one course because you'll be working hours every day trying to get that cover the same amount of ground in four weeks that is covered in um 15.
• 07:00 - 07:30 but students do it i've never done it but uh students have done it in fact uh my university they had three week courses and you did 15 weeks and three you're working all day and every day you have something to do i said no way morning miss barnes for me anyway in the skag now mrs
• 07:30 - 08:00 blevins good morning good morning morning oops okay i'm glad you all are hanging in there because this is when some students kind of throw up to throw their hands and say
• 08:00 - 08:30 college isn't for me then they go out and find out how hard the world is without a degree they come back sometimes uh the next semester sometimes ten years later but i always say you'll be back and a lot of times i i've been proven true mr bob remember me from 15 years ago i said well i don't know but i know i probably told you you'll be back and here you are
• 08:30 - 09:00 so i'd make it work his life is too short okay good morning miss morrison and and uh ms
• 09:00 - 09:30 anne's patch good morning good morning morning good morning hope you're all doing well seems like all of you have a camera it would be ever so kind if every now and again i could see a face or two or three or four then you can see each other
• 09:30 - 10:00 too that could be a good thing of course that's what they say is a good time those that have created zoom i appreciate those of you that submitted the papers in the dropbox i'm getting very
• 10:00 - 10:30 close to finishing what i want to finish and paper number two i just have four more to go which is fairly good considering how busy my weekends are and how much i how long it takes me to get things done i should be providing some feedback soon paper number two people are still getting their feet wet and sometimes i don't like to rush those
• 10:30 - 11:00 anyway one thing i like about your class is you have a tendency to attend even though there seem to be some people missing and um you have you have the tendency to get your work in you know some some of my classes uh the majority is going to work but there's a that old handful and then i feel it my duty to try to
• 11:00 - 11:30 see if i can't help and that's what takes a lot of time you know i spent time i should have been reading papers trying to find out why some students are having problems handing in paper number three it's a rigmarole when you're doing it remotely got email gotta so many things you i don't want to even go through all the process
• 11:30 - 12:00 that i'm doing but i'm getting to the point i'm just not going to have the time to do that you know the student really should be contacting me if they have a problem not me contacting them you know but anyway i don't know how many uh paid attention to the email i'm check that out today more time so that's one of the things i i do like about you all you that are here have been attending regularly and getting your work in one thing i don't like so far you know
• 12:00 - 12:30 i'm gonna be negative now and that is some of us leave out certain things or don't quite follow the directions which are in writing you know uh if the teacher says four paragraphs for paper number two that's what i want you know you just indent four times it can be arbitrary but i want what i want i also wanted for paper number two and some people didn't have it the organization sheet something most people seem to have some kind of outline but not the right not the one i design um and uh the checklist
• 12:30 - 13:00 you know and so folk lost points now i wasn't severe as i could have been because i'm making allowances for a remote environment because this doesn't necessarily happen in a face-to-face situation it just simply does not happen just one or two might mess up there but um it's greater in the remote environment in all classes you know so uh i hope by paper number three it's been remedied you know
• 13:00 - 13:30 if you don't have something it's called email you know you do it rather than me pulling my hair out spending twice as much time trying to get papers done so um you know the grades weren't that bad because i was kind you know you might not be satisfied but i was kinder than i normally am when it comes to that so um so you lost some points but not as much as you would have in a face-to-face setting for paper number two
• 13:30 - 14:00 so from hence on paper number four is what we're going to start working on now let's hope that we can get more and more compliance um one of you even single spaced paper number two it says double space everywhere you know so i don't know what what your high school background is i don't know i was not there but i do know that some high schools are better than others it's just the lay of the land and some teach you more than others
• 14:00 - 14:30 you know that's just the way it goes and so um and i can't solve that because that's the past and neither can you because that's the past but what i'm asking is that we work as hard as we've been working but now i'd like to see progress i always said in uh teaching this course the grades start getting earned for the most part now you know because we're getting our feet wet papers one and two and probably paper three paper four is to start to become that's why i do as many as i do
• 14:30 - 15:00 because the growth tends to happen with paper number four five and six is worth two and so it brings up everything you've done before if you do better you know and usually people do yeah now let me move on um i'm going to share my screen um so i just thought i would have that little little pep talk and i would strongly encourage using the writing center i know it's a remote i know it's a pain
• 15:00 - 15:30 and so forth and so on but they're open every practically every day um from early in the morning until um i think seven or eight o'clock at night so um at least monday through friday i believe um but anyway um we'll worry about that a little bit later but um it's not that hard you know if um if i can figure out some of the technology and i've been struggling but i'm a lot older than y'all you know
• 15:30 - 16:00 so they said that young folk know all there is to know about it well i don't know but um well let's hope that you you do i want to get started here i think everyone's about here now i've got plenty to deal with today um i updated the uh to do plan as you probably have already noticed because we're working on paper number four process analysis due friday november
• 16:00 - 16:30 13. yeah um so not this but because i gotta teach it next week five paragraphs that's what i'm asking for paper number three five paragraphs paper number four five paragraphs paper number five five paragraph paper number six five paragraphs it doesn't change two to four pages of text typed and ms polsky double spaced you know in dropbox okay page 7374 the workbook i'm assuming
• 16:30 - 17:00 you have the workbook if you don't go get it order it's probably still something sitting there waiting for you if you haven't ordered it might not i don't know how long it will take to get it if you haven't at this late day gotten that but you read page 73 and 74 i'm not going to read it to you and i do want the theme organization worksheet which i will show you as we get closer to the deadline for the paper i'm not going to show it to you again today
• 17:00 - 17:30 final draft outline post writing exercise for process which i sent you last week last week it was tuesday last week so that's why i didn't send it again underlying thesis plan of development one student not in this class one student in another class underlined almost everything in the paper uh you have to unclick off the underlying icon at some point see these things we
• 17:30 - 18:00 have to know because every job i've ever had i've had to produce text i'm not talking just hack i'm talking about when i was in the business world when i was in finance when i was in retail for a number of years i had to submit and they wanted to typed and they wanted a double space or you had a problem with your supervisors you know so i'm just telling you how how it is and and yes they have what they call secretaries they call administrative assistants now
• 18:00 - 18:30 i've always had to do my own work i had to learn how to do my own typing now i definitely have to do it because all the administrative assistants and they do help and that wonderful people are remote you know at this point um 100 points i already emailed the handouts i changed the date for the topic do i didn't want to be you know i pushed it to friday you know so you can submit the paper report sheet that i sent you last week i send you every time practically um by
• 18:30 - 19:00 friday november 7th i thought a little bit more time was in order quiz under quizzes brightspace d2l trying to be explicit here multiple choice due by saturday november 14th you know review study guide take the quiz next week after preparing meaning reviewing the study guide if you have a printer printed out if you don't have a printer write down some of the stuff
• 19:00 - 19:30 you know this is a time to be creative library project november 16th i try to put them in some kind of water as you might notice um uh 2020 uh five percent of the gray 74 points you know please do it please work on it and get it done i haven't peaked to see who has done it yet but you know because it's just november has just begun journal entries due friday november 20th 2020
• 19:30 - 20:00 again four required all i want is a cover page and a final draft for entries typed double spaced and that's pretty much what i've been saying for the last three weeks or more three on subject strategy essays one on what was learned in the course um one more for extra credit if you do five and that could be a cultural activity then i thought i would type in the other option since i you know you could do two on subject strategy essay essays should be nested there one on a cultural activity and one on
• 20:00 - 20:30 what was learned in the course that would give you four if you want extra credit do one more on subject strategy essay that's the way handling that so there are two options i'm proposing with or without extra credit i sent you the grammar packet i didn't want to wait you know because it's already november and the sentence combining exercises to be completed by november 23rd as i uh told you last week emailed as an attachment
• 20:30 - 21:00 you know now it's a pdf and i suggested in the email that you get some paper you know a notebook or or something and just number and write down the answers i will give you the answers because i'm not sure myself how you write on the pdf there's a way of doing it you know but i'm not sure exactly how to do it if you have a printer you can print it out but it's a whole lot of material to print out you know there's a point and then you know you could write right on it so there are
• 21:00 - 21:30 several options depending on the equipment that you have i wish the college provided everything if this were a perfect world i'd have everyone have the same laptop the same one that they would do their school work on you know and provide every resource possible including a printer but you know this is not a perfect world process a unit handouts emailed as attachments you know last week and some these things have been emailed to you recently how to
• 21:30 - 22:00 write a process essays we're going to be dealing with we're going to deal with the thesis and plan of development and just to make you aware of comparison and contrast is the next unit and i plan well i will be starting it next week so i'll be spending this week on process um and finish it up and i'm gonna spend two weeks on it and then what you will do is work on the paper in the meantime i'll be teaching comparison contrast these are the readings for process analysis i plan to go over the
• 22:00 - 22:30 knife and why leaves change color in the fall please read those two items that i sent as a pdf i plan to deal with them on wednesday of this week and you can read the numbers and then i left some things in like keeping up with the work and that kind of thing it needs to have a high priority because it's food on your table i mean i look at look at just like that you know i did that as a as a student you know you know i i wanted to do something that i love to do
• 22:30 - 23:00 but i wanted to get paid for it you know and i didn't want to continue in poverty you know you know and just because you show up and just because you hand the paper in i'm under no obligation to pass you the quality is not there because a few of you have wrote me little notes with the paper like i want to get a good grade i want to do that i want you to get a good grade too but you got to reach the standard and i've been teaching nearly 40 years and i kind of know what the standard is standard is and i kind of know what
• 23:00 - 23:30 students can do even if english even if english is your second language because i've studied french and i was nearly a french teacher that's how much french i took in high school in college you know i wasn't quite fluent i won't claim that but i wrote papers longer than some of you are writing papers in english i wrote them in french and they didn't give us a lot of time and they were typed a lot of them you know so i'm just letting you know i know how language works you just have to
• 23:30 - 24:00 drill and drill and drill whether english is your first language or your second or fifth you know language acquisition is not easy it takes time but there are certain things that you need to work on you memorize and you practice and you read and you struggle that goes for everybody so that's why i'm emphasizing tutoring access writing center hack homepage
• 24:00 - 24:30 you know i like if i had time i'd show you that but i don't right now i'm starting to run really shy of time and then to register for spring classes my advisees are now filing in um and that's a live web link to do that follow the prompts and then i left up the care center and this is vote week you know if you um you know registered duly registered um and eligible because some of you are might not be 18 um because i have some students they
• 24:30 - 25:00 told me their papers are 17. so you know so therefore they're not eligible to vote until 18. but i thought i'd put that on there that particular image that i sent as an email to you because it is your civic duty if you're a citizen of the united states as you say we duty you know this is probably the most important election ever in the history of the united states that's what people have been saying i'm only quoting
• 25:00 - 25:30 this is the grammar packet um i'm going to try to quickly go through this it tells you pretty much what to do with each of the item the item and the action to review seven deadly sins of writing 10 most common grammar errors just read that i'm going to show you it in a minute non-sexist language you know how to use pronouns you know uh correctly uh and not exclude women or even men uh commonly confused words just know how to spell them and what they and how to use them you know transitions
• 25:30 - 26:00 that's where exercises begin you know we want you to do the exercise uh preferably on a separate sheet of paper uh karma do exercises you know i will give you the answers agreement exercises you know just number and do them all um send skill review do exercises comma splice uh same thing there in sentence evaluation practice i sent that's a sentence combining item which i'll show you in a moment i sent it to you you know you choose the best sentence
• 26:00 - 26:30 either a or b i used to collect that you know i've decided not to i may change my mind in the future i decided not to because i think you have enough to to deal with i used to collect it and grade it you know um but i'm not going to collect that i'm not going to grade it i'm just going to give you the answers and it's on you you're a college student your adult you can ignore all this and die on the final exam or you can do it and once and for all clean up the daggone grammar
• 26:30 - 27:00 you know i had very strict teachers when it came to grammar you know some of the papers i'm giving cease to when i was in college and in high school would have got an f you know because they did not allow but so many grammatical errors i'm just letting you know and the content of course had to be good too you know and we wrote under pressure i was in an academic preparation high school program that was one of the best in the city a city i lived in you know so when i went to uh college i
• 27:00 - 27:30 was i didn't think i was well prepared but i was head and shoulders above the average student coming into the classroom and i worked harder probably than most of them seven deadly sins of writing you can see what they are fragments run on deadly sins means grade dropper subject verb agreement pronoun calmly confused words pronoun u verb tense issues 10 most common grammar errors and how to avoid them and they're listed and it gives you the
• 27:30 - 28:00 error and the correction you do well to read over this i put this together cut and paste it as you can probably see but it's got the 10 most common and yes they happen every semester in almost every paper you know so um and and then i added this ten grammar mistakes that make you look stupid they're all listed the error and the correction for each one you know and
• 28:00 - 28:30 that's one i've been correcting a lot number two corrected number three recently number five comes up later in the semester as an error corrected number six this semester already you know correcting number nine in several papers you know but once you are confronted with it guess what non-sexist language it gives you an example and the alternative now most people this has become old hat for the most part but i give them to you
• 28:30 - 29:00 anyway so you know how to use pronouns um in the paper it comes from purdue owl which is one of the greatest writing centers in the country now i was wondering why that page just happened to be blank commonly confused words you know when do you use the word they sound alike but they don't mean the same and use them differently got to be careful and the computer will not catch it in spell check
• 29:00 - 29:30 you know you just have to know the difference between those two you know and there's two pages of that i used to test that but i'm you know i'm gonna let you just review it then the answers are there you number write on a separate piece of paper the correct answers fill in the blanks all the answers are there for you just have to put them in the right place and then comma that's gonna be a little bit more challenging because in the
• 29:30 - 30:00 classroom i would just say just put in the comments you know just put in the comments um but that's kind of hard to write on the screen right on the sheet unless you print it out or you write the sentences which isn't going to kill you it's going to take up some time but it's not going to harm you to do it what harms you is not doing you know gives you the rule just put in the comments practice one is what i would tell folk to do only do
• 30:00 - 30:30 practice one but some of us need to do practice one and two when i was a student they only assigned the and the algebra problems uh in high school um um the ones that had the answers to it yeah well how does that help i did them all i did all of them you know i did the same thing in trigonometry the same thing in calculus and so there are quite a number of pages i'm just scrolling through
• 30:30 - 31:00 it's taking up a little bit more time than necessary because i want to get to the agreement exercises it explains what it is and then do all the exercises you know and you can number from one to whatever and just put the right one in and then when you get the answers you can check it you get wrong you review no no i don't i may have class time to use it i'd like to have class time to do it but what i've done in
• 31:00 - 31:30 a remote environment is i give you the exercises assign them then i send you the answers and it's up to you to deal and they have done just for the most part just as well on the final exam with some of these same issues as i when i was in the classroom and went over everything still giving the answers either way you know so that's how i clean up grammar and usually it tends to work by the last
• 31:30 - 32:00 paper you know so each day do a little something you know um you know the hardest part is who and whom which i'm coming up on now and you will get the answers now it's up to you to reconcile you know because maybe in high school you didn't do homework maybe in high school you didn't have homework maybe in high school you didn't care i don't know like i said i wasn't there but somebody else should have been putting food on your table and the roof over your head and
• 32:00 - 32:30 clothes on your back then but at some point if you're not already doing it now you will be putting a roof over your own head you know and clothes on your back and food on your table and maybe you'll have some mouths to feed you know and you want to do good or do well i should say by your offspring and for yourself you know i don't see people look at you know learning in an economic point of view i did and still do
• 32:30 - 33:00 you know then hopefully you'll enjoy what you're doing too on top of it because some people have jobs that they hate most people hate their jobs you know because they didn't plan well and follow their heart and where their calling was now um this is sentence review you will get the answers to this too if it's wrong x you don't do anything just x so number from one to whatever and x if it's correct c throughout the entire thing the
• 33:00 - 33:30 underlying portion on the final exam instead of you know having it like this you'll have multiple choice you have an underlying portion and an a and a b and one of the uh items is correct you have to choose which one so all i did was convert what you're seeing here because this is a good practice that's why i put it together like this i just converted to multiple choice uh in the remote environment you you click after you read the item and try to locate the correction and
• 33:30 - 34:00 then you click you know a or b you know some folks do fairly well with it and so this this reviews you and it's from um the pre-college level these exercises i tried to find the simplest thing as i could find you know pages are all numbered at the bottom by my hand as you can see that's why those numbers are there um i didn't create a table of contents this explained the biggest problem one
• 34:00 - 34:30 of the biggest problem one not the biggest problem is comma splices and run on sentences i call it all run on you know all that you know it explains a comma splice it explains the run on it gives you the error see where it says no no no then the correction look over it very carefully look over the correction very carefully you know because this was the simplest thing i could find online to explain what i mean by run-on sentences and then exercises um that follow
• 34:30 - 35:00 you know run on sentences well some more explanation i should say then the exercises and you just correct the sentence by rewriting it you know hopefully run-on sentences will diminish or disappear altogether because someone would just string comma string that comma come you know come all over the place and before that comma actually a complete sentence because there's a subject and a verb yeah and then a comma and then a subject
• 35:00 - 35:30 and a verb so you got another sentence and you're well it's called that's called a comma splice actually i call it a run-on you're running it together some people have three and four sentences that way yeah what i usually say if it's taking up more than two lines of type uh oh go back and look it over make sure that that where you put that comma that there shouldn't be a period you know because grammar is important common wrong place can change everything change the meaning
• 35:30 - 36:00 but a sentence then i gave you this i'm not going to scroll all the way down here you choose the best sentence it's either a or b now this is easily converted on a final exam multiple choice where you click in the best sentence you know uh but i i suggest you to do this because some of these very same sentences in the exercise you're going to see right on the final exam it may be the exact same sentence you know for which i will have given you
• 36:00 - 36:30 the answer for and hopefully you will remember and get it right you know my goal is to help you to succeed at the level at the college level and maybe even beyond you know because some of you i think if you you know cleaned up the grammar worked a little harder and get the right courses and take the right major for you you might want to transfer to a four-year institution and go beyond that for a masters
• 36:30 - 37:00 or a doctorate you know but don't shortchange yourself because you have to do a lot of writing it doesn't matter the discipline even mathematicians have to put papers together even if they're majoring in math they have to write what is called at the phd level the dissertation probably lots of numbers but i bet there's some words that go along with them numbers you know and then science of course you know well you might not be thinking doctorate but
• 37:00 - 37:30 anyway i don't you know i i don't limit you you limit you i'ma let you do that it won't be me limiting you well anyway you know i say if you have the dream and willing to pay the price go for it that's how i feel about it you know somebody else might say yeah you ain't smart enough i'm not gonna say that because it ain't smart a lot of times because you know because a lot of smart people are stupid now here's the big report she i just
• 37:30 - 38:00 wanted to mention that again and i did send you i got to move on here i was going to wait till wednesday to go over all these things but um i just i'm not one for waiting oh that's not that's not the one i wanted to show you you know because some people do like to work ahead i was one of them i sent you a paper report sheet filled out to process i thought that might help you passing english 101 that's the goal in it requires attending
• 38:00 - 38:30 class which you know kind of important do that but you got to go beyond that some people think that's all they got to do is attend class and maybe hand in the work if they ended it at all they slop it together you know no no no you want to do i don't even see your faces all i see is your work and you want to be your best work that you said then it's a process paying attention because i don't know if folks are paying attention sometimes i wonder and writing good papers you would explain how to do each
• 38:30 - 39:00 one of those things and it'll get you through any course not just english 101 so i thought i'd send you one i created that on yesterday let's see i think that's all i i sent i'm just about ready to do the powerpoint because i didn't send you as much as i normally do because i did that last week um i'm gonna look at the hack home page i'm just gonna take the time maybe it'll help i don't know but i'm gonna look at it anyway um see at the top there's my hack you
• 39:00 - 39:30 probably know that hawkmail at the top learning commons see library for the library project it is and then the bookstore up there but that's not what i want to do for sure tutoring see i hope i didn't click on that too soon let me go back i just went ahead and clicked because i don't have a whole lot of time see tutoring way down there just like i explained and you click on that you know um and then um you probably could click on learning
• 39:30 - 40:00 comments um oh and then you got to wait a minute i was anxious um and then it tells you some things you can do you can submit a paper you know we've got to submit it in time so you can get it back you can view tutor schedules by seeing a tutor and they're smart thinking all together they i did they just did this for this semester you click on see a tutor then you go all the way down to writing and you click there it is i sent you
• 40:00 - 40:30 that page i sent you that you know and you can just click on i'm not gonna click one of these i think i want to drink but you just click on one of these at the right time any name and you're there and they will you know run with it you know teach you how to share the screen and all that you know i encourage all of you to consider tutoring you've already paid for it through your tuition and fees
• 40:30 - 41:00 they don't charge anymore you know good tutoring can cost you anywhere from a hundred dollars an hour forty two hundred dollars an hour so i strongly encourage and i i feel i have so much confidence in the tutors that i believe that 20 minutes with them will yield a result now
• 41:00 - 41:30 oh i spent a lot of time on that let me start my lesson oh let me see i'm not ready to do that quite yet i got to go i didn't want to start the recording till now and i've already started it oh well well if you listen to the recording you'll have to you know scroll past
• 41:30 - 42:00 30 minutes of it but anyway let me begin process analysis let me get a move in here is a how to do it essay you show in words how to do things what steps are taken from beginning to end depending on the type of process that you're going to write finally you tell what you um what you will have when the process is completed you know the results
• 42:00 - 42:30 transition words you use like first second afterwards before then you know those are some of the transition words and yes i'm looking for transition words i would like for them to be in your papers um i also got this document in the mail you know for voting it's process process everywhere and it gives four four major steps
• 42:30 - 43:00 which i'm going to share because of this process step one find your polling place and then a little explanation underneath step two check their hours you know this is people are going to go in person um step three um set a time to vote step four add it to your calendar you know and then it says at the bottom be prepared you know um they're trying to they sent that to me through the mail you know
• 43:00 - 43:30 now moving moving on now moving right along how to fail english 101 you know i just made a little list you know i brainstormed it there's some pre-writing going on poor attendance will do it whether it's remote face-to-face or virtual you know and the rule of thumb is if you miss more than six classes
• 43:30 - 44:00 your grade drops just letting you know how it is missing a major paper you know some of my students have not handed in paper number two some have not handed in paper number three so they're missing two they're missing 200 points you can't recover missing 200 points because usually the a student doesn't do that you know because they'd probably be down to a d anyway if you missed 200 points maybe a c because the papers are 60 of the grade i go by percentages
• 44:00 - 44:30 you know so you can't recover i used to hold students back they missed one but i change that if they can messed up enough points to overcome it nine times out of ten they can't because it's usually that c student in below who does that misses the whole paper and then it just drops right down to a d missing a major point the paper can cause you to fail come into class late all the time oh i've had students do that come to class late remote or face to face
• 44:30 - 45:00 almost every class so they don't know i spent a lot of time just getting to this point i'm at now more time i wanted to try to do that in about a few minutes but you can see that didn't happen not doing the homework missing quizzes oh yes not um avoiding the writing center work that is not complete no
• 45:00 - 45:30 failure to study for quizzes not taking good notes i do invite you to take notes when absent don't even try to catch up thinking the world owes you a living the world owes you nothing you owe the world you know to be the best you you can be having no goals i can hardly believe that one having no goals and uh ignoring your dream of course the dream
• 45:30 - 46:00 is not enough you got to go beyond really dreaming you know you gotta have a plan that's what dr phil would say okay i think i did number 13. i just um well it's actually number 13 in the slides but i'll just uh repeat it um you know just so that you can really get an idea of what process is all about and hopefully maybe the paper topic
• 46:00 - 46:30 diet and guidelines for cancer prevention quickly choose a diet rich in a variety of plant-based foods eat plenty of fruits vegetables and fruits maintain a healthy weight and be physically active it tells you process tell us what to do drink alcohol only in moderation if at all select foods low in fat and salt prepare and store food safely and then the last one always remember do not choose tobacco in any form
• 46:30 - 47:00 you know i went to that rather quickly because i believe i did that before i did not do this this is where i originally intended to start how hurricane is formed and we've had plenty of them this year probably more than we've ever had uh on the planet uh hurricanes and it's the process you know and we're just looking at the idea of this gagged now that's all we're doing looking at the idea process i haven't gotten many papers on hurricanes but anyway
• 47:00 - 47:30 thunderstorms here's how it begins i don't know if you follow this begin growing in an area over the tropical atlantic ocean that's you know that's like phase one in a sense or a stage one the operative word process is steps stages perhaps thunderstorm swirl and become a tropical depression and they have names ready for them
• 47:30 - 48:00 you know they're using the greek alphabet because they ran out of names now winds reach 39 miles per hour classified as a tropical storm not yet a hurricane when winds top 74 miles per hour the storm becomes a hurricane and then number five the hurricane dissipates over land you know breaks up and
• 48:00 - 48:30 hopefully goes away but a lot of times um it seems that's not the case lots of rain you know still some wind maybe happening now this might give you some ideas as well but yes i want a five paragraph essay yes i want a three-part plan of development um yes i still want a detention getter i haven't read paper number three yet i'm gonna hit that sucker
• 48:30 - 49:00 as soon as i can you know i got to finish up paper number two then give the feedback which i'm you know not in the rush to do um because people sometimes improve by just writing not by seeing the previous feedback but sometimes that works too but um maybe you got the concept understand the concept plan the development but i'm still working on it job interviews let's say you're writing a paper on job interviews how to be successful well you need to
• 49:00 - 49:30 prepare so there's a preparation let's call it stage or preparation steps the interview itself and then you mention the do's and the don'ts you know what to do during that stage in the post interview you know what you do after the interview is over there are certain things that are necessary to do follow-up and the like writing a paper we've already taught pre-writing writing and rewriting three-part plan of development right there cooking not too happy about food papers
• 49:30 - 50:00 but you know if you're a pretty good writer you might be able to pull them off um i usually try to stare people away because those things are can be quite boring um just to read you know you know get the pan put something in the pot you know it just drives me nuts um but food papers uh are best if you're gonna give me a little history it's an ethnic dish you know something that's kind of special something that you're expert in you know and i've gotten you know a few papers that have been pretty good you know but not many
• 50:00 - 50:30 so you might want to stay away from that one ingredients you gotta get what you need to make it whatever it is mixing and cooking you know the activities of getting it together and serving you know how it should be served and to how many you know and then gaining weight you know um now some people might not want to do that um
• 50:30 - 51:00 in fact you need to maintain a healthy weight but some people do not have a healthy weight in other words they way too too little you know and so they need to you know put on some pounds get hungry you know a little humor here actually pig out you know eat more calories than you need and then relax don't do any physical exercise afterwards or before and weight can be yours um even though i don't recommend it um
• 51:00 - 51:30 excess weight is not good um and there is a product that some people do buy it's called cv weight gainer you know because they have they need to gain weight or they want to bulk up because they want to uh be a bodybuilder or something like that but anyway the point is group the steps under a plan of development be sure to organize the paper carefully so the reader can follow the points that you're trying to make supply
• 51:30 - 52:00 enough details please now before i get to ann grace's and that's coming up very soon six steps to happiness i want to do some defining the process further defining because i've already done some here's the process that some people use to vote we talked about voting gave you some steps in the upcoming election they don't
• 52:00 - 52:30 that's the problem you know then they complain about who gets in then some well they just pick a winner anybody will do they don't do much preparation at all well there are many steps involved in voting you see process analysis is a method of game rules we had a little attention getter last week on on rules of the house game rules car repair manuals which are now online
• 52:30 - 53:00 or digitized you know you know and so they have to they're all computerized these days i guess some of them are probably in print cookbooks method of cookbooks process is a sequence of actions with a specified result which we tried to say the previous slide powerpoint slide is divided processes divided into its component
• 53:00 - 53:30 steps that's the analysis is process analysis the method grows out of our need to know how we ourselves and our surroundings work and its purpose is almost always to explain i've been saying this since last week explain how to do something how to make something or how something happens for example how our hormones affect our
• 53:30 - 54:00 emotions that process sometimes it's important to prove something about the process or to evaluate it so you want to explain how easy it is to fail english which i just did some people made it a fine art or to urge dieters to follow a weight loss program because it is safe and effective a lot of weight loss programs are neither safe
• 54:00 - 54:30 nor effective you see process helps us to learn valuable information about the world in which we live and it's a very useful and important thinking skills now the examples i want to use from here on probably till the end of the period i'm going to use the idea of this of the of the topic happiness just to explore the concept of process analysis
• 54:30 - 55:00 and my sources and grace not my hand grace that was what they could just called her an article that i read and she had six wonderful steps to happiness they are do something for someone else they keep saying that do something for someone else reach out help do something for someone else because human beings can be very selfish
• 55:00 - 55:30 only think about three people me myself and i do something for someone else do something for myself do something for myself because if you're only doing for others some of you want to be in that profession you know healthcare for example you burn out you know so well that's what ann grace discovered do something for myself number three
• 55:30 - 56:00 that was the first two do something that i don't want to do that needs doing it might be that paper or that math homework or that science project you know or cleaning the bathroom do something i don't want to do that needs doing do a physical exercise that's always a good thing do a mental exercise use that mind
• 56:00 - 56:30 because it'll go the way the same way the belly goes when you don't exercise sufficiently that's what they say and number six do an original prayer that always includes counting my blessings you know this is the month where thanksgiving is celebrated you know and you're supposed to be
• 56:30 - 57:00 counting your blessings on that day you know and grace came up with this do something for someone else do something for myself see do's do something i don't want to do that needs doing there's a don't mixed up in that one do a physical exercise do a mental exercise do an original prayer that always includes counting my blessings now it may seem simple i think it's easier said than done because as more folk did it there'd be more folk would be content and happy
• 57:00 - 57:30 but it really is not simple in my view ann grace died in 1930 she kept a journal starting in 1901 telling how she was able to live a full life even though she was single she never married no if you watch a lot of the programs you know that that uh deal with romance
• 57:30 - 58:00 everybody you know trying to find somebody and do in the television programs but some people don't she was single throughout her life unemployed she didn't have a job she was an unemployed gentlewoman who was forced to live with her relatives that sounds like a recipe for disaster but she found a way to be happy and she wrote this in her journal what she did to be happy
• 58:00 - 58:30 many years later her niece applied some of these techniques her niece was miserable even though she did have a job she had a a pretty decent marriage and children you know in her own home car you know she had things but she still wasn't happy but then when she applied those six things she writes that's how i came across it because i read about it she found happiness and people tend to
• 58:30 - 59:00 say this is what you do to find happiness i've read many an article that supports what and grace came up on with on our own way back in the last century so that's important to know how to be happy but also how to write process analysis because the analysis is not there writing the process paper helps you to do something for someone else if they read it and you give them good
• 59:00 - 59:30 advice and it helps you to do something for yourself too you know getting an assignment done and helping somebody else the next item um well i'm not ready for that you know i want to do gratitude visit because i'm you know some things i have on the screen some things i don't i will get to that shortly yeah i'm not ready for it yet i want to share my little what i call my tidbits on the same subject happiness and
• 59:30 - 60:00 process because i want to prove what ann gray said is accurate by the scholars writing many many years later counting your blessings how to go back to that one and then deal with the 10 secrets to success you know that nice little list there oops that's not the one and grace
• 60:00 - 60:30 number six counting your blessings promotes good physical health according to a study by some us doctors so even the president of hacc said that the meeting on uh a recent meeting said write down things that you're grateful for you know you know he's concerned about our physical health our mental health the faculty counting your blessings for
• 60:30 - 61:00 most good physical health according to a study by some us doctors volunteers who kept weekly gratitude journals reported fewer aches and pains weekly gratitude journals i keep one daily then those who recorded daily hassles or mental or or neutral events this is called gratitude visit a gratitude visit was developed by dr martin e p seligman to promote
• 61:00 - 61:30 strong emotional health he tells people to think of someone who has made an important difference in their lives he asked them to write the story of how that person has helped them and then to visit that person hard to do i guess now you can call them up and do a zoom visit virtual visit today perhaps but you may be able to visit them too in person and then to visit that person and read the story aloud
• 61:30 - 62:00 tests show that a year later the people who had been um who had done so visited the person and told them that that person they visited had helped them they were happier and reported fewer episodes of depression even more important think of what it must have done for those who are thanked you know sometimes getting our focus off
• 62:00 - 62:30 of ourselves does a world of good because people i've read papers and that kind of thing saying i'm depressed you know well you know i'm not making light of depression depression is a serious thing the point that i'm trying to make is here we are the richest country on the earth practically if not you know and there are many many benefits that people can enjoy it's not a perfect land but there are many things to be thankful for and people are depressed
• 62:30 - 63:00 not happy and there are places where they hardly have two nickels rubbed together but they got family they got other um precious things and they are happy so how to be happy this is another tidbit and it asks a series of questions that may surprise you then the sense of the secrets of success coming up where is happiness well it's not found in pleasure
• 63:00 - 63:30 that's not there lord byron lived such a life if anyone did he just lived purely for pleasure he wrote at the end of his life the worm the canker and the grief are mine alone happiness is not found in money jay gould the american millionaire had plenty of that when dying he said i suppose i'm the most miserable man on
• 63:30 - 64:00 earth you know when people are on their deathbed they don't ask to see their bank accounts usually probably never you know now you do need to have enough finance to live life we're not talking about that some people think that money will bring them happiness money will bring you more bills but anyway it's not found in position and fame and our celebrities uh
• 64:00 - 64:30 seem to make us think so lord beaconsfield enjoyed more than his share of both he wrote youth is a mistake manhood a struggle old age of regret that's what he wrote that end of his life it's not found in military glory some people think that on this earth that if i could just rule the world alexander the great conquered the known world in his day and he did one of the greatest generals of all time
• 64:30 - 65:00 having done so he wept in his tent because he said there are no more worlds to conquer you know i'd like to tell you more about alexander the great but i'm going to move on to the 10 secrets to success i kind of got this out of a uh an article i read see it's on over here transparency i i retyped it for the screen here um
• 65:00 - 65:30 how you think and then i'm going to explain each one of them i didn't type everything i just typed the points and then i'm going to explain it just just give you a little idea going on here that's all and i'd like to share this information because i hope it's uplifting and i hope it helps you out far beyond this paper and far beyond this course how you think is everything always be positive number one do's and don'ts
• 65:30 - 66:00 think success not failure beware of a negative environment now my sources investors business dailies where i got this information from and they have spent years analyzing leaders and successful people in all walks of life and i'm sharing with you the ten traits that they found in the research and one number one how you think is everything
• 66:00 - 66:30 number two decide on your true dreams and goals is a g word again goals write down your specific goals and develop a plan to reach them this is the business people now saying this i was at the psychologist a little bit earlier and grace i started it off this is a business people dr phil would agree you know just wishing is not it
• 66:30 - 67:00 just wishing does not make it so you need a plan write the goals down write a plan to reach them number three take action do something action speak a whole lot louder than words goals are nothing without action here's a don't go with number three don't be afraid to get started just do it number four never stop learning never
• 67:00 - 67:30 stop learning go back to school i did that you're doing that i suppose read books get training and skills that's what successful people do five be persistent and work hard success is a marathon not a sprint it's a marathon marathon is
• 67:30 - 68:00 26 miles it's a marathon never give up that's what winston churchill said in the speech in 1950 to graduating class from college i think with columbia university his speech was i've got to memorize never give up never give up never never give up then i believe you sat down
• 68:00 - 68:30 be persistent and work hard miss santos learn to analyze details ms shively learn to analyze details number six get all the facts this is successful people do all the input learn from your mistakes don't expect me to gloss over them i'm
• 68:30 - 69:00 working hard i should get a good grade no that's not the entire picture working hard is wonderful but you want to do well quality does count quality matters no you don't want to say to a patient that just died because of your negligence well i did work hard i tried you know
• 69:00 - 69:30 learn to analyze details and learn from your mistakes not that one particular we want you to prevent that one that i just mentioned but but when you make a mistake that's grammar or math or whatever course you're taking or whatever major you might be the wrong one learn from it and move on some of the most successful people make mistakes milton hershey for example he made a
• 69:30 - 70:00 whole lot of mistakes until he found chocolate which is known the world over so learn from mistakes they say people who don't make mistakes don't make anything focus your time and money number seven don't let other people or things distract you because they will uh number eight don't be afraid to
• 70:00 - 70:30 innovate be different and you can be different just by being you because there's nobody like you on the planet just you yeah following the herd is a sure way to mediocrity and you surely don't want to be mediocre you want to be you and stand out number nine deal and communicate with people effectively no person is an island
• 70:30 - 71:00 learn to understand and motivate others no number 10 be honest independable i mentioned that in the course take responsibility there you go i take no responsibility some people have said this is the opposite take responsibility otherwise numbers one through nine won't matter moving along
• 71:00 - 71:30 you know i just like this particular subject matter as my way of teaching process to give you the idea that you need steps you need points and and you need a picture here before i go on to sample thesis statements i kind of added that this morning you know put a smile on the face here because there are 10 things you can do since we're talking about happiness
• 71:30 - 72:00 10 things you can do to feel good about yourself some people don't feel good about their cells as i said before some people are depressed some people are sad and maybe with good reason but when you're smiling the song says the whole world smiles with you i have to tell myself i'm teaching myself too reminding myself of things be a kid again i've had i've been sharing this for
• 72:00 - 72:30 quite a while you know nothing wrong with an adult but this is being a child and a little child shall need them being a child in a positive sense of that word let me explain i'm explaining each one of these quickly set aside 15 minutes for play not 15 years all working no play makes you dull all playing no work makes you a jerk
• 72:30 - 73:00 pay a visit to a toy store here are some examples some details and buy something that looks like fun blow bubbles chase your cat around the house or squish your toes in the sandbox advises perry w buck buffington proving what ann gray said no six steps do something for myself and gray said and this was written many decades after and grace had already passed these are the phds
• 73:00 - 73:30 who have done the research and it proves what angry said to be accurate pay a visit to a toy store and buy something that looks like fun blow bubbles examples chase your cat around the house or squish your toes in the sandbox advices perry w buffington phd in an atlanta psychologist and author of your behavior is showing expand your horizons number two read the classics for 15 minutes a day
• 73:30 - 74:00 a daily peak in the troubles and charles dickens's novels you know a christmas carol you may have heard of it a lot of movies and plays on that novel but he was fussing about poverty and it's extreme and you've heard may have heard the word scrooge some people are just like that won't even share a penny but he learned how to do just that how to share
• 74:00 - 74:30 the troubles a peek at the troubles a daily peek of the troubles and dickinson's novels will make your own difficulties seem insignificant by comparison number three that's like a gratitude journal number three list five of your strengths see it tells you what to do then explains briefly i'm trying to teach you details here then i'll teach you thesis and how to organize in a plan of development change the list daily and don't be afraid to include
• 74:30 - 75:00 always bowls above 180 if you do that's pretty good if you can do that that's worth listing this a string four help someone without telling them and grace said do something for someone else number three was do something for myself and number two do a mental exercise i'm trying to link it up with a grace have to remember to do that number five
• 75:00 - 75:30 um no number four back to four help someone without telling them pay the toll for the guy in the car behind you you know do something with someone else and gray said change something about yourself is number five let's do something for myself and grace said examples buy new eyeglass frames polish your shoes for once try a different belt buckle or accessory you know there's certain things you can do
• 75:30 - 76:00 number seven talk with a good friend that's good advice meet a buddy for breakfast phone a pal long distance examples of doing something uh number seven pay attention to what they say listen that's a great gift to give someone listening number eight oh number seven and gray said do something for someone else
• 76:00 - 76:30 number eight get some regular exercise and grace did say do that examples half hour jog a quick session with a stationary bike some stretches a mile long walk dr greenberg wrote exercises mastery there are the relaxation benefits the sense of being in control and you get to see the physical results number nine get in touch with your
• 76:30 - 77:00 spiritual side and grace says something about prayer examples meditation prayer or simply a quiet moment it's been communing with nature you know this guy look at the beautiful leaves and the sun is shining today that's something to be grateful for i write that down in my gratitude when the sun is shining i write down sunshine yeah i don't have to buy it
• 77:00 - 77:30 that's something money cannot buy but it's wonderful when it's when the sun is shining or simply meditation prayer or simply a quiet moment spend communion with nature can help you feel more balanced and confident about life that's what the phds are saying and relax number ten relax
• 77:30 - 78:00 try progressive what relaxation self-hypnosis or any other stress busting technique that will take you on a revitalizing mini vacation wash away all the negative energy that's accumulated because it does accumulate over time and sometimes i would argue rather quickly you know 10 things um to do each day to feel good about
• 78:00 - 78:30 yourself and i think it means it's more important now more than ever well characteristics of process analysis an explicit thesis statement two different examples two different examples both with a plan
• 78:30 - 79:00 moving right along a little bit faster than you might want me to but anyway thesis example of how it works process analysis now i need to move it out to the way so i can see all of it and hope you you can see all of it although understanding the grieving process which i'm still going through well it's a lifetime thing you know when you lose a dearly loved one you go through grief
• 79:00 - 79:30 your whole life but you the days get better the sun shines brighter eventually although understanding the grieving process will not lessen the grief that you experience after the death of a loved one knowing that your experiences are normal does provide you some comfort this is just a thesis statement only planned development not included there
• 79:30 - 80:00 this is how to process analysis you know the other approach switching to a low-fat diet a recent nutritional trend can improve weight control dramatically and all that is needed is the plan of development all you see there is the thesis statement process analysis thesis is another example explain how to succeed in the university is the idea here
• 80:00 - 80:30 you know success in university or college students can be successful in university by plan of development there you go and i do want to plan the development i'm expecting one to be there by being on time for class keeping an assignment notebook and managing their time now sample jesus statement sample plan of development
• 80:30 - 81:00 and i do invite you to take notes and i'm giving you examples of thesis statements and plan of development along with it being a good student so for that i added that this morning give you some ideas i want to you know put a few more pictures in uh you know i'm adding to my powerpoint slides as i go being a good student is rather easy now
• 81:00 - 81:30 i've underlined the plan of development i require a plan or development if one is well read paragraph on that works hard paragraph on that you know how to do that you got to talk about how not why and is curious you know how can one develop that thirst for knowledge yeah break the thesis into steps stages or phases
• 81:30 - 82:00 you know different ways of looking at plan of development then discuss each one in a paragraph body paragraph make a list of important elements needed you know part of the brainstorming depending on what type of process you're dealing with give a personal example from your life summarize the process in the fifth paragraph the concluding paragraph not already giving you pointers in the last you'll know how to do that in the paper with a memorable idea the
• 82:00 - 82:30 clincher make certain that the process is obvious and that the process is clear and then i put this on this morning yes you know a good student is someone who is ready to learn offers to help pays attention ask questions follows directions does their best uses a quiet voice that's probably when you're in the classroom talking follows the rules
• 82:30 - 83:00 whatever they might be we have a syllabus for that participates respects others a good student and someone like you you know i just thought that was cute um but the emphasis was on thesis as i run a little bit out of time i'm almost where i want to be not quite though another example of a thesis statement being a good employee requires developing a good work ethic
• 83:00 - 83:30 paragraph on that how to do that good time management skills that too how to do that do's and don'ts and good social skills which i mentioned the last time we met that young folk acting you know according to the article good social skills so there's a beginning steps
• 83:30 - 84:00 to a good work i think middle steps the good time management last steps or ending steps good social skills and then what you're explaining in this type of process paper you know um which is one of the approaches what to do to develop the above skills the actions to be taken you know to make it happen you know do i take a class um
• 84:00 - 84:30 do i job shadow somebody and how to do that how how do i set it up you know do i interview someone you know things that you can do to develop good work ethic because you have to sort of be doing that um good time management skills good social skills and the like well didn't get as far as i wanted to get i think i can well no i think i'm gonna i'm gonna quickly
• 84:30 - 85:00 do this and then i'm gonna come back to it um on wednesday but anyway um happiness cake i want to do happiness cake after i do this i was going to do a sample essay but let me at least share with you the thesis and the topic sentences and the restatement unwanted stress plagues people every day this is written by a student
• 85:00 - 85:30 and then it's not in your booklet even though there are examples that i ask you to read but by changing diet mental outlook and lifestyle that's the plan development changing diet mental outlook and lifestyle stress relief may soon follow then the topic sentences changing a um oh i see a typo there she didn't have that type on there a
• 85:30 - 86:00 stressed person's irregular diet to a healthy one can reduce the amount of unwanted stress after changing a person's diet transitional topic sentence having a positive attitude can also lower stress she talks about that finally changing a person's lifestyle can decrease the amount of unwanted stress then the restatement in conclusion an increase in the amount of stress can make a person miserable however by
• 86:00 - 86:30 restatement changing a person's diet mental outlook and lifestyle stress can soon be minimized you know um make sure i save that and get out of my shear here and one more quick thing i won't be able to do it in great detail but i can show you i retyped the paper that i
• 86:30 - 87:00 would be showing in the classroom i can't show you the original um but you can see there's a title indent double spaced thesis statement and plan development i just read to you underlined topic sentences all underlined and it was four pages well three and a half pages you know i'm not i don't have the time to go over it now but i do intend to go over it get on my share i do intend
• 87:00 - 87:30 to go over it next time now i hope you've got some ideas i hope i was able to uh help you i'm going to spend all next class i said last time i might be able to start comparison contrast but that's not going to happen of course because i want to do that paper and i want to give you some more ideas about process analysis
• 87:30 - 88:00 and also what i want to do next time is look at at least one of those um stories um um the knife which is deals with surgery um and leaves changing color in the fall and then i'll just probably have to do some wrap up the following week because i don't see myself getting it all done on the next class but anyway any questions i almost forgot what damn
• 88:00 - 88:30 i almost forgot what i was gonna say any clarifications needed want anything represented mr hoy any questions ms sharp any mizaka any questions not at this point okay i just want to be sure i want to be sure that uh um people are able to follow along come up with a topic
• 88:30 - 89:00 by friday it doesn't have to be on happiness it can be on any subject that you know well and want to explore okay that's all i have have a wonderful day see you all on wednesday hang in there and take good care of yourselves now ms maysood you wanted to speak to me for a few moments after class so i will wait until everyone is left and then we can talk you're welcome miss
• 89:00 - 89:30 kagno i appreciate it you're welcome ms morrison thank you you're welcome ms santos blackheart blevins bowers livingston and valentin okay now sometimes the names stay up there and i've got a class immediately miss maesu can we talk now
• 89:30 - 90:00 yes okay um i know that you've been um working with something health and that kind of thing i know that gets in the way but i just wanted to explain face to face that in order to pass the course it's very important and i'll work with you it's very important to do work yeah um because there's no other way you know you got six papers you know and they must be done if you don't do all six you won't pass it's just that simple um the um and also the journal
• 90:00 - 90:30 the quiz and the final exam you do everything to the best of the ability that you have and usually people tend to improve you know i expect that to happen in everybody not just that people are struggling i expect the a students to do better papers you know to grow they won't keep that a the same would be students they won't keep that b if they don't show some kind of growth because each paper is a new challenge my other suggestion and that's why i took
• 90:30 - 91:00 the time to show the um how to get to the writing center i tried to show everybody you know just a matter of clicking you know and see where you end up at hopefully in the writing center i want you to use the writing center um tutors you know okay okay um if you can't do it for every paper oh well okay you gotta but i i submit to you and to everyone who's in that should talk to other people the same way
• 91:00 - 91:30 um especially english as second language students ought to live there go there with every paper they've done that and some of them have been able to pull a's and b's in the class the ones that don't don't they just simply do not you know um and so we want to encourage you to do that um you've been very good at emailing me when there's a problem now um have you been able to do paper number three
• 91:30 - 92:00 yeah oh okay good good good because this class is kind of good at getting things at least getting things done and i look at that when i'm grading um so i appreciate that um but for paper number four you know take it to the writings and let the writing center people look it over and give you suggestions i can almost guarantee can't totally guarantee but i can almost guarantee
• 92:00 - 92:30 that the grade will be higher and it will be better because you have good ideas it's not the ideas that's the issue as far as i can tell the idea of the problem is writing those sentences get it in simple english because sometimes that translation thing gets in the way and you put words you don't need or words that don't mean that you know and it kind of then with the fragments and the run-ons and those kind of things and misspelled words
• 92:30 - 93:00 it takes the grade down you know and so i'd like to see some growth and i'm pretty sure i will if you use the writing center so when there's a problem do do reach out and you have been a lot of students just don't they just self-destruct um and i know that you're putting in the effort and i will look at that uh but i need to see some growth i need to see some improvement and i believe that you can do it you believe you can do it or you wouldn't have taken the course so it's a matter of doing your best work
• 93:00 - 93:30 so i hope that we're on the same page here you know it's not you ask for a grade and you get it is that you that you prove to me who have read thousands of papers by now and work with thousands of students so i know what students can do whether english is their first language second language or ninth language you know if you work at it you can make a lot of growth in a short period of time but don't be too proud to get the assistance
• 93:30 - 94:00 you know because they love what they do those writing center tutors and they want to be helpful and they have more than the few minutes that i have right now am i making any sense yeah okay all right so um that's how i think you'll be i think you can still pull the grade up right now it's a a shaky c kind of change you know but i think you could bring it up to b because i've had students who have um
• 94:00 - 94:30 english was a second language sometimes i have half a class that has happened and they were by the end of the semester doing a and b work when at the beginning of the semester they were doing d work what was the bottom line working hard because they know how to do that in the writing center you know okay okay so yeah you have a good day now i've got to go to my 9 30 and if we need to talk some more let me know because i will
• 94:30 - 95:00 after class thank you thank you okay you have a great right now okay bye bye yeah got to go